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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspaper #books
The new devices and The Internet have influenced many activities in our daily life. To read, being one of the
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these transformations. For the above, it is agreed that in
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 future not too far, online content will replace printed
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 and
books
.
This
 change would bring benefits from both
people
 and environment,
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 impact
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 the environment. By avoiding the use of
paper
 for print newspapers we can save a lot of trees.
For example
, just in South America, companies cut down one thousand trees per year to make
paper
. Thereby, those companies are killing the earth, just to maintain their products in the markets.
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 replace the use of
paper
 we would change the future of our planet.
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people
,
also
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, across The
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 we can access anytime to a diverse offer of news and
books
, platforms
such
 as Google Reads and Online New York Times, offer 24 hours access to news . Even for
people
 who avoid screens, because it can affect their eyes, companies have developed
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what
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 simulate printed
paper
such
 as Kindle from Amazon.
As a result
,
people
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books
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 feeling of reading a printed book
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 and can read anytime and anywhere just from their devices. In
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, replacing printed newspapers and
books
 by reading online devices have too
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 benefits. We can help the environment by avoiding the use of
paper
 from trees. As well as you can access to
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 of
books
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books
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 you find in your local store.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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