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Topic: Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is reducing the amount of maximum speed of vehicles. Others think that other ways exist. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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With the advancement in technology mode of transportation has evolved resulting in
need
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of
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 safety rules. Some people opine that setting speed limit is
best
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 option to make driving safe while others opine that there are some other measures
also
 which can be adopted. In
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 both arguments will be discussed in detail , explaining why other methods of road safety are
also
 important.
To begin
 with , overspeeding is one of the major
cause
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 of accidents owing to loss of life and other damages.
Thus
, setting up a speed limit according to daily traffic
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 will be advantageous as it is easy to control a vehicle when it is at a lower speed. To exemplify, in Punjab, on linking
roads
 where small
roads
 connect with motorways speed is limited to 40 km/hour which has decreased the rate of casualties . Another school of thought says that
,
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 other measures
such
 as following
traffing
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traffic
 rules, wearing seat belts, wearing helmets should be considered to be
more safe
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.
However
, waiting at
red
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a red
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light
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 and allowing the traffic to pass will decrease the rate of road
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.
Furthermore
, for pedestrians zebra crossing is a boon as it allows them to cross busy
roads
 easily and safely. To sum up, limiting
speed
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the speed
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 at
roads
alongwith
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along with
 , other traffic rules will collectively improve
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road safety. Both
,
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 approaches go hand in hand and if followed , it will make
roads
 safe.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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