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The crime rate nowadays has decreased compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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Crime
 is a never-ending issue in our society. Some are of the opinion that the rate of
crime
 at the moment is relatively lower than in the past and
this
 was only possible with the evolution of
technology
 that can efficiently decode criminal acts in advance. I personally disagree with
this
 given notion.
This
 essay will discuss how criminals are always two steps ahead of
technology
 which makes it harder for the police to arrest them and control
crime
. If the
technology
 is advancing at its faster pace, so the minds of criminals. There is no doubt that the number of criminal activities has been reduced as compared to the figures of the past few decades, but criminal brains are getting sharper they have the tendency to develop more resilient software that couldn't be solved easily. It has recently been seen in Canada, the tax department of the Canadian government was hacked by criminals and the Canadian Revenue Services Account was down for about 3 days.
This
 reflects that the developed country has all the newly generated technological gadgets, but these criminal minds failed the security of
this
 country.
Moreover
, culprits
also
 possess the same minds as engineers or researchers who act behind the making and launching of updated technological amenities.
Thus
 every other human who possesses similar capability could explicitly unlock the passwords and invade their privacy. In conclusion, even though the
crime
 rate is controlled in the new era of
technology
, the culprits are
also
 getting alert.
Therefore
, I am of the opinion that tech departments of every country should act wiser and sharper for making
this
 world
crime
-free.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance cameras
  • advanced security systems
  • potential criminals
  • law enforcement
  • AI (artificial intelligence)
  • big data analytics
  • forensic science
  • public awareness
  • social media
  • online platforms
  • crime prevention
  • crime rates
  • counterargument
  • cybercrime
  • technological misconduct
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