Many governments have laws that ban the sale and use of hard drugs such as heroin and cocaine, yet they allow people to buy drugs such as tobacco and alcohol. Laws that prohibit the sale and use of hard drugs should be applied to all drugs, including tobacco and alcohol. What is your opinion?
Drugs
are something that could have some effect on Use synonyms
people
’s minds or physical state. Some Use synonyms
drugs
are prohibited from use as they can destroy the health of Use synonyms
people
who consume them. Many hard Use synonyms
drugs
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such
as heroin and cocaine are prohibited from consumption, Linking Words
however
, tobacco and alcohol are still allowed to be used by Linking Words
people
. In my opinion, I agree that laws should be applied to all hard Use synonyms
drugs
without exception.
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Firstly
, hard Linking Words
drugs
without exception have the same Use synonyms
impact
on Use synonyms
people
. It changes one’s mind, and physical state, and Use synonyms
also
affects health. Linking Words
For example
, Linking Words
people
who use tobacco daily are more likely to get lung cancer. Use synonyms
Moreover
, it Linking Words
also
has the same and maybe larger Linking Words
impact
on the Use synonyms
people
around them who can get affected in case they inhale its smoke. Use synonyms
People
who consume alcohol are more likely to get serious health problems Use synonyms
such
as kidney problems. Linking Words
Secondly
, it can Linking Words
also
have an Linking Words
impact
on social life, Use synonyms
such
as increasing the rate of accidents. Linking Words
For example
, some heavy drinkers driving their car can hit someone easily as they can’t think clearly. Linking Words
Thirdly
, it Linking Words
also
increases the rate of crime that we can see, in real cases, Linking Words
people
need a lot of money to buy hard Use synonyms
drugs
, so the possibility of the crime will increase.
In conclusion, all Use synonyms
drugs
are substances that can affect the way your brain works and how you feel and behave. It is not only giving Use synonyms
impact
to the Use synonyms
people
who consume it but Use synonyms
also
give Linking Words
impact
to the Use synonyms
people
around them, the society. Use synonyms
Therefore
, governments should ban all the usage of hard Linking Words
drugs
as they have some negative impacts on Use synonyms
people
's lives.Use synonyms
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