Many governments have laws that ban the sale and use of hard drugs such as heroin and cocaine, yet they allow people to buy drugs such as tobacco and alcohol. Laws that prohibit the sale and use of hard drugs should be applied to all drugs, including tobacco and alcohol. What is your opinion?
Drugs
are something that could have some effect on people
’s minds or physical state. Some drugs
are prohibited from use as they can destroy the health of people
who consume them. Many hard drugs
such
as heroin and cocaine are prohibited from consumption, however
, tobacco and alcohol are still allowed to be used by people
. In my opinion, I agree that laws should be applied to all hard drugs
without exception.
Firstly
, hard drugs
without exception have the same impact
on people
. It changes one’s mind, and physical state, and also
affects health. For example
, people
who use tobacco daily are more likely to get lung cancer. Moreover
, it also
has the same and maybe larger impact
on the people
around them who can get affected in case they inhale its smoke. People
who consume alcohol are more likely to get serious health problems such
as kidney problems. Secondly
, it can also
have an impact
on social life, such
as increasing the rate of accidents. For example
, some heavy drinkers driving their car can hit someone easily as they can’t think clearly. Thirdly
, it also
increases the rate of crime that we can see, in real cases, people
need a lot of money to buy hard drugs
, so the possibility of the crime will increase.
In conclusion, all drugs
are substances that can affect the way your brain works and how you feel and behave. It is not only giving impact
to the people
who consume it but also
give impact
to the people
around them, the society. Therefore
, governments should ban all the usage of hard drugs
as they have some negative impacts on people
's lives.Submitted by nadiamanda.salsabilla on
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