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Some people think that environment problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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There are many environmental problems around the world and the impact is extremely high. A major number of people are claiming that
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 issue should be
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 with internationally;
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 others believe that it would be easier to deal with them nationally. In my opinion, there are many benefits with both national and international
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 in cause handle with the
environment
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 so if both are involved
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 there is a high chance of controlling. On
one
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 hand ,the
environment
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 is not just about
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nation
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, if anything happens to the
environment
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 it will affect it globally.
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this
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 reason, the officials should consider the environmental issue as a global issue.
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,
last
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 year in Australia, there was a huge bush fire and the pollution that was produced travelled to the nearest country,which is New Zealand. The air pollution,which was generated from the bush fire,
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damaged the ozone layer in the surrounding region and it eventually
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global warming.
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 , if
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nation
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 starts doing the controlling measure,
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 will encourage the neighbouring countries to do it.
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, there are many benefits that can get the particular
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.
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, if the
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 stops using fuel products,
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 it can control
co2
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CO2
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 emissions. Indeed, the co2 is a major culprit in rising temperatures,
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 the direct advantages of reducing fossil fuels could improve the atmosphere. In conclusion, I strongly believe that environmental issues
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 belong to any
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,and it
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 has many advantages if all the nations work together on similar issues. Global warming is a main cause
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 the
environment
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 and it can be spread from
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nation
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 to
other
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another
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 nations if any outbreaks happen like wildfires.
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