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Some people think that the goverment is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree?

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There are a variety of opinions on whether or not the government should allocate funds to
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. While some claim that these financial resources can be used in another sector far better, I personally believe that spending on
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 has equal importance by another part. Admittedly, I am certain that there are many reasons why spending a budget on
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 is necessary for governments.
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 of all, different types of
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 play an important role in improving the economical aspect of
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.
Such
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 types of
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such
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 as cinema or painting exhibitions have a positive impact on the economic improvement of humanity. Having success in these major not only can introduce the culture of a nation to the world but
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 can lead to
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 enhancement and creating a variety of job opportunities.
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, if governments pay less attention to the
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, it may have a negative impact on artists and they do not have enough motivation to do their best.
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, psychologists believe that using
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 in
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's atmosphere can boost individual mood. In industrial nations, people have many difficulties and financial problems so they may not have enough finance for entertainment. Running a music Carnaval or street
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 exhibition with some free activity for all the family members
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 as painting, dancing and learning a branch of
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 related to their will in the holidays can lead to a dynamic
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.
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, It is true that there are many crucial parts that governments should give them an appropriate amount of financial support,
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 as the healthcare system and education. Indeed, the more these parts of
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 would be strong, the greater the chance of well-being guaranteed among people. But, cutting down
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 finance is not a suitable way for solving these problems. Increasing the tax of some private companies based on their income may be a better solution. In conclusion, spending money on important portions of a country
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 as health and education is vital,but I believe
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 money should not come from reducing the share of
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 and it
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 has equal importance for having a mentally healthy individual.
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