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Some think scientists should be allowed to send messages into space to communicate with other life forms while others believe this is too dangerous. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Many scientists think that they need to allow
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the
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space for communicating with other forms of species.
However
, some others say that the experiments can
be endanger
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to
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human life living on the earth. In my opinion,
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 of different outcomes and discuss both views.
On the other hand
, today scientists are doing
research
 on other planets and species.
Firstly
,to ensure that human
beings
 can start their life in other
space
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.
However
, scientific
research
 still continues by sending the different
aircrafts
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 and planes and waiting decades for various outcomes.
Secondly
, to do
experiements
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experiments
 and communication purpose globally
instituitions
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institutions
 are spending more time and money.
For instance
,NASA waited three to four days after sending
spaceship
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 to the satellite.
Finally
,many projects are still continuing their
research
 and development these days, because to ensure that mankind can survive with other
ailiens
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aliens
airlines
 and other forms of
beings
 in other
satellite
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satellites
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. From others
perspective
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,they believe that today astronauts are trying to reach the unknown species which are far from us and keeping
lifes
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to risk on the earth. There
is
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 scientifically proven facts that scientists are doing many inventions and sending rockets and flights to the mars and moon because to ensure that living
beings
 from
earth
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 can even settle down
in
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 the planets.
However
, we don't know that
ailiens
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aliens
airlines
 and
beings
 in the space can build
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a relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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 with
the
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people and
this
 can lead to
endanger
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 many
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lives
lifes
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. To conclude,any
research
 and development should be the positive outcomes of
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human life because it will always
outweighs
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advantages
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the advantages
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 from disadvantages.
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