Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, However, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are different
opinion
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opinions
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about
progress
in a
country
. Many
government
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governments
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believe that the vital aim for them is economic
progress
, while some
people
like me argue that other kinds of
progress
are indispensable at the same level.
One
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the one hand
government
pay more attention
on
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economic
progress
. They think a
country
thrives when its economy
be
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is
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at a high level. So that they
endeavor
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endeavour
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to gain
this
goal. Global trade is
expending
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expanding
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as a consequence of economic development
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, therefore,
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therefore
more jobs are provided and community will witness
decline
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a decline
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in poverty which it has
impact
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an impact
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on
people
's living standard. In fact, a
country
with
good
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a good
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economic can provide proper situation and facilities for citizens,
however
other factors are
also
involved to reach that.
On the other hand
, some
people
say that despite economic
progress
they are in demand of education, health and other
progress
simultaneously. In a community for development,
people
should be trained to be familiar with various knowledge, and in
this
way, they can take advantage of cutting-edge technology and science that
it
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triggers countries’ improvement.
In addition
,
government
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the government
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should consider society well-being to have
versatile
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the versatile
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and healthy population to perform their duties in the best way because they are
backbone
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the backbone
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of
workforce
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the workforce
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in society so if
government
condone these types of
progress
at the same time,
country
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the country
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may get in trouble even in economic purpose. All in all, It is an indisputable fact that all these improvements have effects on each other In conclusion, I believe
although
economic
progress
is integral for a
country
,
wide
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a wide
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range of development must be applied uniformity on society for all-rounded
progress
.
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  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
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