Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others thinks that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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There are many criteria to examine
people
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’s intelligence, but for some
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the best measure is
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. I think it is true, but only up to a point. Most
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believe that an intelligent person is more successful than ordinary
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people
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. They consider that clever human beings achieve their goals sooner than normal ones. In general view, wise
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are richer than ordinary
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they know how to make decisions
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critical situations. Based on research at school in Italy, smart students with high intelligence scores have
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contribution to
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of their societies when they grow up.
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, intelligence is a key to success.
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, scientists consider that by measuring each
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human creature's
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in their daily growth, they can guess how talented they are. They have power to choose and participate in meetings that illustrates all of
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are capable enough to be successful
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it differs by person, how likely they use it in their lives.
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, animals are not inventive due to their capacity of
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they can not specify what is the best or worst for their activity,
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a man being can consider and make
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. To conclude
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work can be examined by the person's daily tasks. Altogether, goal achievement is how you think well and decide wisely to be satisfied with life and as can be seen each body in the world have the opportunity to make a good life by using their mind. In my opinion, success depends on how hard you try & believe in yourself.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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