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Many parents choose to teach their children at home instead of sending them to school.Do you think the benefits of homeschooling outweigh its drawbacks?

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Many parents opt for educating their juveniles at home, rather than sending them to school for education. While I realize some positive impacts of
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 method, I do think that its flaws overshadow the benefits. On the one hand, it cannot deniable that homeschooling is an optimum method for some kids, especially
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 endowed with gifted abilities.
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, the school's syllabus cannot adequately address the educational talent needs so that homeschoolers may be mandated to follow parent's guidelines. When teaching the young at home, parents are likely to recognize
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's potential and learning styles,
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 aiding to appropriate learning materials and arouse student's enthusiasm,
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, kids having a talent in playing music should have been learned and guided his skills by the adults of the family whose jobs are related to music.
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, there are some plausible disadvantages of tutoring the youth at home rather than school attendance in terms of communication and cooperation.
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 and foremost, the most obvious downside of
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 measure is that these
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 may miss out on the
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-hand social experience.
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 means they may have difficulties in socializing not only with their peer but
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 with other adults, except for their families and
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 they receive the knowledge from.
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, homeschoolers are not taught in a team so they may fail to be a good team player and join in any team-building activities. A lack of social and communicative interaction can hinder the growth of interpersonal skills in the future. In conclusion,
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 I think homeschooling is a suitably educational option for some
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, I strongly believe the strengths of traditional classrooms far outweigh its drawbacks.

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