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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is well known that some countries have a
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 with more young
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 than old
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. Even
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 fact could have both advantages and disadvantages, In my ,opinion the positive implications of having a youthful
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 over-weigh the negative ones.
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 essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages giving examples to support both points of view. On one hand, having more younger
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 could lead to a lack of professionals in society. The older
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 may be more educated than the young one,
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 is being why they have had more time to study a professional career during their lives.
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, to become a specialist physician it is needed at least 10 years of university studies and
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 may not be able for a young adult yet.
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, the younger
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 have less life experience than the old
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.
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 after their 50’s may have been through a lot in life and they may be more prepared to solve any day-life problem than younger
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.
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 could help to form a less stressful society.
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, younger populations are likely to have a higher rate of crime,
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 could be because young
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 have more energy to commit crime than old
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. A study from the University of Chile showed that in the south of Chile, where the
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 is mostly young, the rate of robs and crimes
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 twice higher than in the north where most of the
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 were in their 50’s and older.
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, youthful populations are in general more active and happier.
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 may be because they have less old age-associated illness leading them to work more and maintain them-self more active. Adding to the fact that healthy
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 can work more efficiently, with
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 they can contribute to the economy of the country, making money
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 of spending.
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, it is a fact that old societies spend a lot of money on health for their old citizens. Another positive aspect of having young adult populations is that there are more chances of having outstanding sports professionals. Young
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 have more time and more energy than old
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 to practice and become excellent sport professionals. In ,soccer most of the players retire from their soccer career when they turn thirty years old. With old
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 there would be no time to start a sports career. And
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 but not least, young societies are more likely to have outdoor activities for the community.
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 more likely to participate in them. Old
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 may be too tired to go out. To conclude with the arguments given above, I firmly believe that the advantages of the youthful
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 over-weigh the disadvantages. Even though, there are some positive aspects of having an older
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 that we should consider.
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