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The movement of people from agriculture areas to big cites has caused many problems at both places. What are the reasons for this problem and how can it be solved.

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Globalisation and urbanization have led to the
development
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 of big
cities
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 and have encouraged
people
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 to move to
cities
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 to seek a better standard of living.
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,
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migration
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 has caused a population explosion and a shortage of manpower in the farming industry in villages. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the impact of movement on rural and urban
areas
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 and suggest some possible solutions. There are several reasons why
people
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 move to metropolitan
areas
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. One of the major reasons for
migration
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 from rural
areas
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 is infrastructure and
development
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such
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 as better education, health care, sanitation, housing, business opportunities, transportation, better recreational
facilities
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, ample job opportunities and good social life attract which result in overpopulation in urban
areas
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.
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, overcrowding in urban centres leads to problems
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 as lack of housing
facilities
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, congestion in small
areas
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,
development
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 of slums, inadequate sewage facility and so on. To exemplify, the Dharavi slum in India is known for
people
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 living in small
areas
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 with poor sanitation, inadequate water and sewage
facilities
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.
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,
migration
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 affects agricultural activities in rural
areas
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. Rural
people
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 are involved in occupations like farming and when they move to
cities
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 for jobs there are fewer
people
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 to work on farms and
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 less the agriculture yields.
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, several steps to overcome these problems are to decrease the
development
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 gap between the rural and urban by providing more opportunities in villages. Government can minimize
migration
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 to big
cities
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 by providing educational and medical services
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 as establishing a hospital in a central area between villages, establishing universities, better transport
facilities
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 and sub-government departments like a mini-city in the centre of the countryside. In conclusion, the rate of
migration
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 can be controlled by bringing the
development
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 in rural
areas
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 remote and rural
areas
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 should be carried out with strategic implementations and missions keeping in mind the quality of life in both place

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