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Risks related to Global warming must be carefully evaluated and acted upon by communities around the world. This essay will further provide supportive facts and illustrations.

I agree that new inventions in the field of communication, health, data processing and many other fields have made our lives more comfortable and longer than before.
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, I am not in agreement with the view about
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 era is the best time to live in as compared to
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time
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. I will
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 essay. Nowadays, our
life
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became
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 more comfortable than
a
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life
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 of kings in history.
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, we can travel to any part of the world within
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 short time, we can communicate with friends and relatives no matter wherever they are, we can easily clean our house/
cloths
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/utensils with the use of machines, we can get news from all over the world instantly, and so on. All of these benefits
are resulted
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 from
latest
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 research and inventions
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 over
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 100 years. These new technologies have really changed the way we live.
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, because of
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advancement
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advancements
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 in the field of medical
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 in terms of new
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 equipment and medicines; we are able to increase the figure of
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life
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 span of
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being
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. But,
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 to all those advantages of
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 and technology, we have lost many things which were available before.
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, fresh air, unpolluted water, organic food, peaceful
life
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, some of the important animal spices, etc.
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 brought by
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 and technology
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 impacted badly on
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 basic things. It is not only important to live long but
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 we should live
healthy
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. To summarize, the advancement of
science
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 and technology have given us a more comfortable and long
life
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 than before;
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however
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 we have lost some of the important basic things.

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Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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