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Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. Which do you agree?

#people #schools #purpose
School
 plays an indispensable role
for
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 the future of
the
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children. A few individuals believe that
school
 should
organised
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 various enjoyable things, whereas others hold the opinion that its main objective is only to educate children. I,
however
, believe that
school
 should
involves
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 both
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education and pleasurable
activities
. In
this
 essay,
i
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 will discuss my view in detail. There are numerous
reason
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reasons
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 to support my stance,
however
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,however
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 the most important one is that
school
 is
place
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a place
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 where
students
 spend most of their time. If there would
be only study
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 in
school
not
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 entertainment,
students
 would easily bore and will not give much attention
in
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 studies.
For example
,
students
 mostly look
periods
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at periods
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such
 as health and physical education, music, dance to fresh up their minds.
Hence
, it is very essential for better concentration in
their
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all subjects.
Secondly
,
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the school
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school
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schools
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 should organise various co-curricular
activities
 for all kinds of
students
. As teachers help the
students
 to find the hidden or inner talent which may be
benefical
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beneficial
 for their future.
For instance
, there are numbers of
students
 who do not well in studies but are very talented in other
activities
 like dance, singing song, acting.
Thus
 educational institution helps the
students
 to find out their talent and
also
 help to shape their future or gain popularity. To conclude, it can be said that
school
 should adopt both studies and entertaining
activities
. As it helps to
holistic
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 development of the children. It will help the student to refresh themselves as well as
hidden
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a hidden
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 talent.
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