The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology which can prevent and solve crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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modern era,

technology

become

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a part of daily life. We use

technology

in schools, offices, and homes etc. and now

it's make

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it makes

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great

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a great

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impact on criminal activities. Now numerous

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cases were not solved in the past because we don't have the high-

technology

but now it is easy to solve them. I

am agree

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that

technology

help

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to minimise

crimal

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criminal

activies

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activities

however

, it is

also

rise

cyber

crimes

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with, In the past, police records show numerous

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robbery cases but now there are drastic changes we can see that because of the

survelliance

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surveillance

system.

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, today in every

malls

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, shops, have CCTV CAMERAS, which help to prevent

from

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robbery or shoplifter because police can easily find them with the help of CCTV footage and

also

if people know they are

monitering

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monitoring

, they obey the law and stay away from unlawful activities.

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Furthermore

, speed

camers

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cameras

also

help to prevention in traffic

crime

activities

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technology

really

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helpful in so many

sector

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but it

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also brings

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also

bring new

crimes

For example

Cyber

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Cybercrime

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crime

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crimes

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nowdays

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nowadays

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are very popular. There

are

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number

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a number

the number

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of cases we hear about related to

cyber

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cybercrimes

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crimes

Therefore

government makes

cyber

cell

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for these types of

crimes

. Today so many

hyjackers

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hijackers

hyjack

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hijack

bank accounts and transfer all money to their accounts and so many are not arrested since

police

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can't find any proof of it.

Moreover

, so many security

system

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hacked by

terroriest

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terrorist

terrorists

and it harm

nation

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security. In conclusion,

technology

is one of the

cause

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causes

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the

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cyber-

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cyber-crime

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crime

rising,

although

also

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vital role

for

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future

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since it is helpful in

crime

rates to we can't ignore

this

fact and modern

crime

people can handle cybercrime because they are smart.

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