The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology which can prevent and solve crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
modern era,
technology
become
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a part of daily life. We use
technology
in schools, offices, and homes etc. and now
it's make
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it makes
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great
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a great
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impact on criminal activities. Now numerous
of
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cases were not solved in the past because we don't have the high-
technology
but now it is easy to solve them. I
am agree
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agree
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that
technology
help
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helps
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to minimise
crimal
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criminal
activies
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activities
,
however
, it is
also
rise
cyber
crimes
.
To begin
with, In the past, police records show numerous
of
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robbery cases but now there are drastic changes we can see that because of the
survelliance
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surveillance
system.
For instance
, today in every
malls
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, shops, have CCTV CAMERAS, which help to prevent
from
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robbery or shoplifter because police can easily find them with the help of CCTV footage and
also
if people know they are
monitering
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monitoring
, they obey the law and stay away from unlawful activities.
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Furthermore
, speed
camers
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cameras
also
help to prevention in traffic
crime
activities
In contrast
,
technology
really
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is really
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helpful in so many
sector
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sectors
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but it
is
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also brings
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also
bring new
crimes
.
For example
,
Cyber
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Cybercrime
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crime
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crimes
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nowdays
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nowadays
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are very popular. There
are
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number
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a number
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of cases we hear about related to
cyber
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cybercrimes
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crimes
.
Therefore
government makes
cyber
cell
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cells
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for these types of
crimes
. Today so many
hyjackers
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hijackers
hyjack
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hijack
bank accounts and transfer all money to their accounts and so many are not arrested since
police
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the police
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can't find any proof of it.
Moreover
, so many security
system
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systems
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hacked by
terroriest
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terrorist
terrorists
and it harm
nation
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national
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security. In conclusion,
technology
is one of the
cause
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causes
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the
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cyber-
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cyber-crime
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crime
rising,
although
it
also
a
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vital role
for
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in
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future
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the future
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since it is helpful in
crime
rates to we can't ignore
this
fact and modern
crime
people can handle cybercrime because they are smart.
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