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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

#meat #diet
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With
veganism
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the veganism
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 trend, many
people
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 are convincing themselves that plant-based foods can suffice when it comes to daily nutrient needs, so they tend to remove all traces of
meat
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 from their diets.
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, I have to (politely) disagree with the anti-
meat
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 argument. There are a variety of reasons why
people
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 should have
meat
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-related foods in their meals.
First,
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many important nutrients derive from animal sources.
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, if we are meant to subsist on vegetables alone, we will experience vitamin deficiencies because
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some of the vitamins can only be obtained from
meat
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. Another reason is that
meat
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 helps keep blood sugar levels stable
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 its fat and high protein content.
Steady
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 blood sugar level is critical in preventing diabetes, as well as other chronic diseases.
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, with a moderate level of blood sugar,
people
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 are less likely to drool for fattening snacks and sweets which are unhealthy foods. Apart from the practical advantages expressed above,
meat
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 offers a host of critical health benefits.
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, when
people
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 work themselves to the bone trying to gain muscle, they have to nourish their
body
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bodies
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 appropriately. In fact, they can take protein supplements, but the best source of protein is fresh
meat
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.
Meat
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 contains vitamins and minerals like zinc that aid muscle growth, which assists in muscle repair.
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,
meat
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 is one of the best sources of iron, which boosts energy levels and combats fatigue. Iron deficits can easily put
people
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 at risk of
anemia
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anaemia
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and low energy, which is why
anemia
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anaemia
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 is a chronic problem for vegetarians. In conclusion, with the reasons mentioned above, I think that
people
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 should not cut
meat
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 out of their diets because it has too much to offer.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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