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Nowadays young people are leaving their homes from rural areas to study or work in the cities. Why does this happen? Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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There has been a growing
trend
 in the migration of youngsters from rural areas to metropolises for the acquirement of academic knowledge and competitive vacancies.
This
 essay aims to examine the major cause for
this
 phenomenon and discusses the pros and cons associated with
this
 change on an objective stance. The rationales for
this
trend
 lie in the belief that central
cities
 are the only place that you can go to increase your living standards. There is no denying the fact that metropolises offer a greater chance of receiving better studies and jobs due to their high density of education complexes and top-quality companies and corporates.
This
, in turn, can increase your possibilities in finding a more suitable and diverse workplace or university for higher academic pursuits.
In addition
, living in
cities
 can provide you
the
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 access to adequate facilities and infrastructure
such
 as public transports, health care services, entertainment
centers
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, and so forth, which can hardly find in rural areas.
On the other hand
,
this
 ongoing
trend
, to some extent, can increase the disparity in the
labor
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 force for rural developments. Young generations may find themselves unfamiliar with the rural environments after finishing their education or find a suitable job in the
cities
 and refuse to go back to their homeland.
In addition
, the influx of people from surrounding areas might put pressure on the environments in the central
cities
. The city’s infrastructure may not cope well and result in the collapse of the environment processing systems
such
 as drainage and garbage collecting facilities. Despite certain advantages mentioned above, my stance is that
such
 a
trend
 could be a social tragedy if not be firmly regulated and lack support from the government.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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