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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is considered that lots of
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 are happier in their teenage years while others think happiness comes in
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 regardless of its challenges. I will discuss both views and
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 give my opinion in
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 essay. On one hand, most
people
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 consider the teenage years as the happiest period of
life
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 because
life
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 is easier and they have little or nothing to worry about.
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, teenagers have all their needs met by parents/guardians without any need to really work for pay. All they could worry about is going to school and for that,
life
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 gets easier and happier for them.
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, a survey made by an undergraduate who handed questionnaires
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 50 participants showed that 80
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 of
people
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 wished they could go back to becoming teenagers.
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, it is thought that
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 is happier
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 teenagers.
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, I think despite the bulk of challenges that comes with
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, it brings more happiness in
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. The reason is
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people
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 are no longer anxious about the future as they already met their goals.
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 to say, what individuals get worried about while they were younger would have been achieved in
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 so there isn’t much pressure anymore and so they relax and enjoy with their families. Taking myself
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, while I was growing up I wanted to be a doctor and now I am one already which has made me
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 and relaxed,
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 enjoying my adult
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.
Adulthood
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 gives a sense of
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 which makes
people
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 have a happier
life
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. In conclusion, some
people
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 think the happiest phase of
life
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 is in their teenage days because
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 is easier
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, but I think more happiness comes in
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 because
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 already met
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their
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 goals at
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 phase.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Formative years
  • Autonomy
  • Fulfillment
  • Wisdom
  • Significant choices
  • Exploration
  • Financial responsibilities
  • Deeper relationships
  • Personal growth
  • Accomplishments
  • Character development
  • Life milestones
  • Adulthood
  • Adolescence
  • Carefree nature
  • Achievements
  • Life satisfaction
  • Stress-free
  • Independence
  • Responsibilities
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