Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In today's modern world, we are facing more
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environmental
issues
than before. While some believe that the main climate
issues
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the lack of specific plants or animals, others think that many significant factors are involved in
such
a problem.
This
essay will explore both arguments and gives some details about why other measurements are more crucial to preserve our planet. On the one hand, many think that the main problems concerning our
surrounding
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due to the lack of some species or
vegitation
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vegetation
. The reason is that generally plants and more
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trees are responsible to create oxygen on the earth and without them not only we will lose the beauty of our nature, but
also
we will face
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environmental
issues
such
as air pollution, which may bring some diseases
consequently
.
For example
, there are huge amounts of tropical forests in
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, and daily we are witnessing the
rate
of deforestation
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degradation
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this
area is increasing significantly, resulting in a dramatic decline in producing oxygen in the world. The higher
rate
of deforestation, the less producing clean air on the earth.
However
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there are several causes for
such
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our planet. These days, many countries are generating Co2, resulted in rising usage of fossil fuels, which may lead to air pollution and
thus
they directly
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in
global
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warming
rate
.
Furthermore
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quality of petroleum is another issue, which consumes daily with a million
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cars,
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increase the level of carbon emission.
Finally
, many factories put their wastes in the rivers and oceans, which has led
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of many marine animals.
As a result
, human involvements are more influential on those problems. In conclusion,
although
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of some kinds of animals and trees have a direct correlation with environmental
issues
, in my view other measurements
such
as quality of fuels, increasing
rate
of non-renewable energies, and leaving out the
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in the water may have more detrimental effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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