Despise the advances made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve this problem?

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years

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we have seen a dramatic increase in the development of agricultural

methods

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. Yet, many people from all over the world suffered from

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lack of nourishment. I think there are several reasons for

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problem and

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believe there are some solutions to tackle it. I believe there are several reasons why individuals being hungry in many

countries

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while

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industrial agriculture

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been raised in recent years.

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of all, the development of agricultural industry occurred in developed

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which suitable sources of water and soil. in

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when in

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society,

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understand the importance of enhancement of

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they try to seek viable ways to empower it.

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, in developing

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with

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facilities and science of agriculture, providing these

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is not easy and they usually suffered from less

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of nutrition. Take

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as a good example, when they found improvement of agricultural

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play an important role to have

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wealth and reach

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the country

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and providing sufficient

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food

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for people who live in their cities is crucial so their best for finding bet

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of producing higher

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foods

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while in many

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they do not accept

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and until they use traditional ways of producing

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is not only led to

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amount

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of vital

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but

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the price of

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has been increased because they come from

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other nations

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developing country while they do not provide enough

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vegetables

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and meets consuming

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this

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this food

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foods

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would be hard for consumers.

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, there is several

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to tackle

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problem.

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of all, international

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related to providing

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should have enough facilities and transportation system to transport

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this elements

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from

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produced more than there need to poorer

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job with less

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of financial resources, many people would porches them.

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, developed

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should transform their information and technologies to other

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with suitable natural sources and teach them to be independent by producing suitable types of

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. The more they can be staying on their own feet, the greater the chance

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we can root out hungry among citizens. In summary, I believe there are

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cause

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for

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question and if international societies try to solve

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hand- in hand it may be possible with solutions mentioned above.

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Despise the advances made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve this problem?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people think the government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that the only reason for learning language is in order to travel ro or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that an international car-free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways to do this. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible.

Please elaborate on your current physical and mental health, including any dental or oral treatment, medical interventions, and mental health therapy or counseling.