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The first car appeared on the British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion on the issue. Use your own experience or an example to support your idea.

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The
number
 of
cars
 has been doubled year by year, causing several problems. Certain individuals think that encouragement of alternative ways of transport as well as international laws are required to restrict
excessive
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the excessive
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 volume of
cars
. I am in complete agreement with
this
 statement as it can alleviate traffic
jam
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jams
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 in the
country
 and,
also
, current environmental problems. Fostering choices of transport rather than
cars
 reduce traffic congestion. If
government
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the government
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 provided a great quality of public transport for
his
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its
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 citizens, they would choose
this
 over their
cars
 because it offers convenient and price-effective.
In addition
, international laws that limit the
number
 of car possession even lower
considerable
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the considerable
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 amount of
cars
 on the road. In Thailand, almost every people own at least one personal
car
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care
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 because
government
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the government
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 did not take any action and provide
proper
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a proper
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 alternative way for citizen and
this
 makes traffic in the
country
 jam.
Furthermore
, the natural environment would be better by doing so. Acidic gases, that destroy the atmosphere and cause global warming,
such
 as carbon dioxide as well as noise pollution
which
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apply
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emitted by
cars
 will be lowered;
hence
, the current global warming situation which many people concern
is
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 alleviated.
Also
, in Thailand, there are both air and noise pollution,
causing
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caused
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 by
cars
, and
this
worsen
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worsens
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 the environment in the
country
. In conclusion,
government
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the government
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 should encourage people to pick other options of commuting and control
number
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the number
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 of car ownership to reduce
cars
 on the roads and to toxic gases. At the end of the day, reducing
number
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the number
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 of
cars
 certainly makes a
country
 more pleasant.
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