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In many countries, increasing numbers of people are becoming interested in learning about the history of the house or building where they live. What are the reasons behind this? How can individuals research this?

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There is an upward trend that residents are investigating into their
accommendations
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accommodations
recommendations
. In my opinion,
people
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 do
researchs
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research
 about the history of living places out of
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curiosity and security. If
they
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 really dire to learn about own houses, the older generation and local building authorities could provide a large
amout
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amount
 of relevant materials. On the one hand, the reason why
people
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 want to learn more about their
buildings
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 is that they are curious about unknown things. It has been hundreds of years since human beings started exploring the past. We try to set up a connection with the past by studying history and observing some old things, like ancient
buildings
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.
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 the other hand, by researching the past of their houses,
people
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 can understand that whether there are some structural risks at home.
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, part of European
buildings
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were
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 constructed in the
last
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centuray
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century
 and they need to be
renewaled
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renewed
 regularly. If we have the renovation
scheduals
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schedules
schedule
 of these old
buildings
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, it will be beneficial for us to avoid potential risks. There are a variety of ways that individuals can get more information about their houses.
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, it is available for residents to gain some interesting stories vie communicating with the elderly who has lived here for a long time
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 if they are just interested in the past of their home.
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,
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personal views would be inaccurate if
people
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 are worried about the quality of the house. They can contact
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local building institutions to figure out
about
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potential structural faults.
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, if
this
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 building is new,
internet
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 must provide a lot of useful information. In conclusion, individuals have various reasons for researching their homes.
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 a large
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amount
 of materials can help their researches of
buildings
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, they should choose proper methods depending on different situations.
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