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Some people think that secondary school children should study international news as one of school subjects. Other people think that it is a waste of valuable school time. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people share a perspective that secondary school children should study international news as one of
school
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 subjects. And
that is
 mainly because it enlightens them with more knowledge and broadens their horizons.
Likewise
, there are other folks who consider it
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a waste of valuable school time because they think students should focus solely on academic books. In the essay, I will discuss both sides. In my opinion, I firmly believe reading foreign articles should be mandatory for peripheral academy kids.
To begin
 with, learning about things happening worldwide from
peripheral
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 academy
level
 will surely increase a pupil's intelligence
level
. They can enlighten themselves with stuff happening globally
such
 as development or any good and bad stuff like natural calamities or wars. Information as
such
 will make them more knowledgeable and broaden their horizons. It will
also
 help them in the long run in building their careers and will convert them into strong capable personalities. It will come in handy during inter-institute competitions like debates or during speeches. To put it more simply , it is quite easy to render someone speechless during a debate
competitiom
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competition
 if your wisdom
level
 is high compared to them
On the contrary
, there are folks who discourage reading global headlines in institutes. It is because they are parochial and have
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very orthodox thinking that a tutee can only score good grades if he or she studies academic books. They feel researching
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foreign headlines is a waste of time as minore
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 tutees should only focus on excelling in institutes by mugging up conceptual books. To conclude, reading global headlines in phrontistery should be made mandatory as it is quite advantageous for a tutee. As mentioned earlier in the essay, I hold the view that studying cosmopolitan bulletins as one of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global perspectives
  • cultural understanding
  • interconnected world
  • critical thinking skills
  • discern biases
  • global citizenship
  • curriculum
  • academic development
  • sensitive content
  • news cycles
  • structured curriculum
  • positive developments
  • fostering hope
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