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Some people think that secondary school children should study international news as one of school subjects. Other people think that it is a waste of valuable school time. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people share a perspective that secondary school children should study international news as one of
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 subjects. And
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 mainly because it enlightens them with more knowledge and broadens their horizons.
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, there are other folks who consider it
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a waste of valuable school time because they think students should focus solely on academic books. In the essay, I will discuss both sides. In my opinion, I firmly believe reading foreign articles should be mandatory for peripheral academy kids.
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 will surely increase a pupil's intelligence
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. They can enlighten themselves with stuff happening globally
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 as development or any good and bad stuff like natural calamities or wars. Information as
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 will make them more knowledgeable and broaden their horizons. It will
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 help them in the long run in building their careers and will convert them into strong capable personalities. It will come in handy during inter-institute competitions like debates or during speeches. To put it more simply , it is quite easy to render someone speechless during a debate
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 is high compared to them
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, there are folks who discourage reading global headlines in institutes. It is because they are parochial and have
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very orthodox thinking that a tutee can only score good grades if he or she studies academic books. They feel researching
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foreign headlines is a waste of time as minore
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 tutees should only focus on excelling in institutes by mugging up conceptual books. To conclude, reading global headlines in phrontistery should be made mandatory as it is quite advantageous for a tutee. As mentioned earlier in the essay, I hold the view that studying cosmopolitan bulletins as one of
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 subjects is necessary in order to educate students in the right way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global perspectives
  • cultural understanding
  • interconnected world
  • critical thinking skills
  • discern biases
  • global citizenship
  • curriculum
  • academic development
  • sensitive content
  • news cycles
  • structured curriculum
  • positive developments
  • fostering hope
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