When professionals from developing nations are searching for jobs in rich nations, the former nations are losing their human resources. Therefore, developing nations should not allow this tread. How far do you agree or disagree?

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, the phenomenon of highly educated personnel moving from their native countries to an affluent
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, is rampant. A school of thought advocates that the third world countries should not let
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happen because of the loss of workforce, for whom they have spent enormous resources.
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essay vehemently disagrees
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the above argument because of the following reasons. The cardinal reason is that
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process eradicates unemployment in the developing
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but guarantees
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to them. To illustrate, millions of unemployed Engineering and Nursing graduates, have moved from India to the UK and Australia and enjoy lucrative
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benefits. Not only does
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enable the immigrant to reap the fruits but their children
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avail quality education and far better living conditions.
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, it goes without saying that
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restriction
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on
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would be a
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exercise. Another reason is that
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adds to the hard
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reserve of the developing
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. To substantiate, these migrants remit their savings in foreign
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which comes
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to balance the
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transaction. Unlike the employees
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home country, these immigrants receive their pay and perks in foreign
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which is sent for their kith and kin
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back.
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reinforces the argument that any impediment to professionals working abroad would boomerang. Admittedly, the resources incurred to educate these professionals do not contribute
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the progress of the
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argue to
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discontinuation
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of
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movement. Prima facie,
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holds some water and appears genuine and acceptable. But,
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acts as a catalyst to mitigate unemployment and maintain
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currency
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balance. Suffice
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say, the phenomenon of
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provides employment and enhances foreign
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reserve. As
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movement should not be prohibited
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promoted to vouchsafe employment commensurate qualification and earn hard
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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