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In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents choosing to self-educate their children at home rather then sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

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Recently, in some countries, many couples choose to teach their
children
 at
home
 rather than sending them to school as usual.
This
 trend has pros and cons and will be given in
this
 essay. On the one hand,
home
education
 has some advantages for
children
's development.
Firstly
, the
kids
 can concentrate on practice than theory.
Children
 will receive a suitable schedule for studying to get
balance
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the balance
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 between learning the theories and applying them in real life.
Parent
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Parents
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 know which subjects are necessary for their
kids
 and they let
kids
 be free in learning what they like and trying the outdoor activities which relating to what
kids
 learn.
Secondly
,
children
 can avoid doing too much unnecessary homework in order to explore
another majors
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another major
other majors
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such
 as art, computer, science, etc.
For example
,
parents
 can guide their
kids
 to learn more about
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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 when
parents
 realize
kids
' interest in
this
 major.
On the other hand
,
this
 trend
also
 brings some back draws. The
children
 do not have friends
in
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of
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 the same age so that they may lose their motivation in their studies. Having competitors can help to create the inventions or stimulate the
ambious
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ambitious
 goals in each person.
For instance
, going to school can help
children
 find their soulmates to develop together or establish a creative community of
the
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people
have
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who have
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 the same vision.
In addition
,
parents
 may lack
of
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apply
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qualified technical skills of teaching to educate their
kids
 at
home
. They may not have
a
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standard
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standing
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 instruction to guide
kids
 from step to step. In the worst situation, some
parents
 spend much time on one
aspects
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aspect
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 of
education
 and ignore the others, like they want their
kids
 to learn about science and do not let
kids
 try
in
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apply
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the art subjects. In conclusion, the advantages of
home
education
 do not outweigh the disadvantages. It is essential for
parents
 to choose
the
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suitable methods
of
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for
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 their
kids
 in
education
.
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