In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents choosing to self-educate their children at home rather then sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

Recently, in some countries, many couples choose to teach their
children
at
home
rather than sending them to school as usual.
This
trend has pros and cons and will be given in
this
essay. On the one hand,
home
education
has some advantages for
children
's development.
Firstly
, the
kids
can concentrate on practice than theory.
Children
will receive a suitable schedule for studying to get
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between learning the theories and applying them in real life.
Parent
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know which subjects are necessary for their
kids
and they let
kids
be free in learning what they like and trying the outdoor activities which relating to what
kids
learn.
Secondly
,
children
can avoid doing too much unnecessary homework in order to explore
another majors
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such
as art, computer, science, etc.
For example
,
parents
can guide their
kids
to learn more about
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computer
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when
parents
realize
kids
' interest in
this
major.
On the other hand
,
this
trend
also
brings some back draws. The
children
do not have friends
in
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the same age so that they may lose their motivation in their studies. Having competitors can help to create the inventions or stimulate the
ambious
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goals in each person.
For instance
, going to school can help
children
find their soulmates to develop together or establish a creative community of
the
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people
have
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the same vision.
In addition
,
parents
may lack
of
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qualified technical skills of teaching to educate their
kids
at
home
. They may not have
a
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standard
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instruction to guide
kids
from step to step. In the worst situation, some
parents
spend much time on one
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of
education
and ignore the others, like they want their
kids
to learn about science and do not let
kids
try
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the art subjects. In conclusion, the advantages of
home
education
do not outweigh the disadvantages. It is essential for
parents
to choose
the
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suitable methods
of
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their
kids
in
education
.
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