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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not.howere , it is sometimes claimed that any chlid can be taught to be come a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Today many
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 spending their time on the topics of sports or music in science, while other
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 believe that with learning can be extended their
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 and I will present my opinion
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 of all, many
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 think that natural
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 and tutor why they claim that effectively connecting both self-study and certain talents.
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 , those who do have special talents relative to gene's their ancestors so
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 obtain knowledge about them.
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, other
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 consider that
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 and having teachers for learning diverse fields including sports or every instrument music and so on with certain
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 and can be fastly achievement for their target and would be scussfull their future and
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 has been based on standards teaching so probably can manage innovation goal . I personality think that having a
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 with standard training for adding a new knowledge beside nature abilities in
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 when they are exercising one of the sports field or one of the music instrument ,they obtain methodical knowledge sooner than self-study. The conclusions, inherent
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 without favourite or vice versa hard-working without natural
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 would be neither attractive nor beneficial.
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