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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Some people believe that environmental issues would be solved by the whole world rather than
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 or some special groups,
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 others strongly support something like air pollution, sea-level increasing, among others should be addressed by the own governments. In
this
 essay, I will be discussing both views and give my opinions. On the one hand, it is obvious that if global organizations and authorities have corporations it would be perfect
due to
 they have more efficient resources that can be used as researchers and experts in one's field,
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it will be addressed
easier
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 and quickly.
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, WHO, a famous volunteer organization in the world, help a number of nations that
faced
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 dangerous environmental issues and
give
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 suggestions to them.
On the other hand
, someone supposes those flooding, pollution, kind of natural disasters all have happened in their own states.
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, the citizen has a responsibility to deal with those kinds of questions,
while
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 other irrelated inhabitants to
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,
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 could
be
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lead to unnecessary
raise
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 cost of money and budgets.
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 flooding and local people who live in the same places, where
they
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choose to call global teams to help them despite their government did not address. In conclusion, I definitely think that it is evident for everyone to deal with environmental problems, is an urgent task who live on the planet, on Earth. Both
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 scale and local government should beat
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environmental problems together.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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