many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes the many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
argue that we have to find a solution to decrease
consumption
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of sugar in
foods
and that's increasing the
price
of sugary
products
, which almost all
foods
and drinks contain
high
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amount of that. I completely disagree with
this
statement that
this
solution gonna be effective enough. There would be at least two
facet
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to
this
proposal.
Firstly
, If a
food producing
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company decide to increase the
price
of
it's
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sugary
products
, other rival companies may implement the same policy so
price
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the price
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of all sugary
products
will increase simultaneously.
Secondly
, it is unavoidable that
people
still believe high-quality
foods
and drinks surely have more
price
in compared with low-quality
products
.
Furthermore
,
consumption
of
this
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these
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sugary
foods
couldn't decrease and it
also
can mislead
people
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into
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buying these
products
.
Finally
, these sugary
products
are still so detrimental
for
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body health and nothing will change by increasing their prices. There is ample evidence that how different Nations can manage
production
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and
consumption
of these detrimental
products
. By educating
people
about her their lifestyle and
substance
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that they consume.
For instance
, show commercial advertising about sugary
products
drawbacks.
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government can allocate some special benefits to factories
which
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that
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can produce
foods
with fewer amounts of sugar. Numerous studies have constantly found that food raw materials like artificial glucose
that is
harmful
for
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health can be replaced with other natural sugary elements. In conclusion, I would argue that
consumption
of sugary
products
should be restricted but not from increasing the
price
of
product
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the product
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, there is
also
various
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a various
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solution for
this
trouble as I mentioned few above.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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