In many countries, paying for the things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is using of a
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smart
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phone
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. It is undeniable that a mobile
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has become an essential part of our life.
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, there is a great number of citizens in many countries buy items by its. It is obvious that there are pros and cons
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knows that a cellphone is an extremely useful device for modern individuals. Many people do
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by phones in supermarkets as well as online. The main advantage is that people can order any items on the
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without cash, not looking at location or time. A good example here is the
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in one or two days, using
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phone
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. A lot of citizens in many countries do it every day around the world. Another side of
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frauds
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, the main reason is that to pilfer all money from a bank account is easier by a mobile
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. If you visit some unknown
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and apply your data about your credit or debit cards rogues may withdraw your money. We should be more careful using a cellphone buying on the
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. Taking
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Russia or Ukraine. It is a common situation for these countries when
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’s swindlers try to cheat people. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that advantages overweight disadvantages if we will be wiser and will buy online using only popular
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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