It is often claimed that wealthy nations should provide financial support to poorer countries for welfare, health, and education. However, there are those who believe that it is the responsibility of developing nations to provide these services. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The vast majority of
people
believe that wealthy nations
is
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able to provide financial
aid
for poor
countries
and help them to improve welfare, medicine and education.
Although
, it is believed that services and financial
aid
should provide developing
countries
.
This
essay partially agrees with
such
a viewpoint because there are counties with
lack
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of resources
which
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could not
to
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develop
economy
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the economy
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by themselves. It is often believed that rich
countries
possible
to
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help
other
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others
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by virtue of their developed economy and wealth fare. One of the most important things is
that poor counties
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that poor county
those poor counties
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faced
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with different
challenges
such
as
extremely
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poverty, disease and unintelligence so
that
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could lead them to
even
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an even
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worse
situation
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situations
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. In some cases, there
are
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surge
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a surge
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of criminals and potentially making some
people
joining terroristic groups.
On the other hand
,
the
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society should remember that all of us if a part of
big
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the big
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worldwide community and wealthier governments should take care of
poorest
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the poorest
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and provide financial
aid
for
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overcome
challenges
.
For instance
, it is well known that some poor
countries
have huge
challenges
like diseases, lack of education and
moreover
they are not incapable to cope with by themselves. Undoubtedly, some situations could lead to unpredictable outcomes for rich
countries
because many
people
from poor
countries
will immigrate to
rich
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the rich
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for work or study. There are some well-known examples when locals were unhappy that government allow them to stay in
country
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the country
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. To conclude, the question about providing financial
aid
to
poorest
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the poorest
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countries
has always been controversial and seems to be sensible because there are always many
countries
which
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that
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needs
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help. In my opinion,
the
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society should always care about each other because without it many
people
around the world could suffer from
challenges
.
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