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At the present time, the population of some countries include a relatively large number of young adults, compared to the number of older people

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There is no doubt, every age groups are important to build
country
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 economy. In
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today’s world,
overpopulation
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problem
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 can
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around the different parts of the world. Some
people
 were arguing, increased youth population
was creates
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 more benefits rather than
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older
people
.
This
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To begin
, the highest number of
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 crowd has been increased by some regions. It has
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 of advantages.
Such
 as, young
people
 can work under pressure and much harder rather than older ones. They can cope with difficult situations, which are dealing
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various circumstances. For an instance, they can work with different industries and moving heavy items.
In addition
, status can
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 their domestic production (GDP), export income, the young crowd has more talents in new technology fields and innovative industries.
Moreover
,
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the company
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company
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 can choose
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a candidate
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candidate
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 for fulfilling their requirements. On the opposite side of that statement, the highest amount of youth generation means
government
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 needs to fulfilling their basic
needs to fulfilling their basic
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needs and wants.
Such
 as, education, employment, provides opportunities.
However
 , the government can control their expenditure for health care and medication due to
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 of the elder
people
, while they can invest the public funds through any other projects like
,
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 infrastructure and public services.
However
, consider with the older
people
 they have more knowledge, past experience and sense. One major drawback is their knowledge has been outdated. In conclusion, as a
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 every human is more valuable. Every single person contributing to the country economy.
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