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In some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. What problems does this cause and what are some of the possible solutions?

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In some places, youngsters avoid casting their votes, and
this
 approach brings several concerns for those nations. The principal issues with
such
 a mindset are the
re-electing
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 of same candidates by adults and declining of countries economy
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however
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 the possible solutions for overcoming these obstacles are the awareness by parents to their children and subjects related to the importance of voting in a democratic surrounding. When young adults choose to stay away from
elections
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the elections
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 process, it causes
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 individuals to get elected again by the elderly.
This
 is mainly because many adults feel comfortable voting for the same candidates than going for new faces, which according to them may jeopardize their present conditions.
Such
 an approach ensures those candidates of their victories even if they do not provide any progress to society. Naturally,
this
 brings down the overall economy of any nation as there will be less efficient and money-making people in power.
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, as only 25 per cent of total youngsters vote every year in India, the country ranks at 10th position of being the poor country in the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratic process
  • political instability
  • skewed representation
  • governance
  • erosion
  • civic education
  • alienation
  • policy-making
  • accessible
  • incentives
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