Some people think that the detailed criminal description on newspaper and TV has bad influences, so this kind of information should be restricted on the media. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Day by day, we can easily
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a great of
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related
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and violence. Some individuals have
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negative feelings by
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descriptions
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newspapers
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and
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and they
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this
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kind of
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should be limited. In my opinion, I totally have the same thinking and support restricting detailed
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descriptions
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about murderers on social
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. There are two important reasons why violence and bloody
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should be limited.
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, there will be bad influences on readers and watchers, especially teenagers. Approaching
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will scare children and
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of murderers will become
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obsession with them. To the Time
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in Japan, there are annual average
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% of children being
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due to violent obsession on TV.
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, in the long run, youngsters will have no belief
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life and society and be afraid of creating
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and communicating with
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around them.
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, following too much
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related criminal description lead to insensitivity phenomena in society in these days. When images of killing
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appear frequently,
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gradually consider it as normal
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and have negative thinking about life. They accept savage activities and are easily entangled in crime.
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of providing detailed inhumane
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high frequency on
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,
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should limit
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kind of
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and just show criminal
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with extenuating
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for the purpose of enhancing awareness. In concluding, savage
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on TV and newspaper not only bring no benefits for
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but
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create obsession and negative thinking for them.
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, it is necessary to restrict violence and bloody
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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