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4. In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

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It is quite obvious to recognize that many developed
countries
 are experiencing remarkable increases in
life
expectancy
.
This
 essay will discuss some possible problems
this
 trend can bring and propose several solutions to handle those . One of the major challenges of the growth of elderly
people
 is that it seriously puts a heavy burden on the economy and
government
 expenditure due to the greater funding demands of retired
people
 .
For instance
 , older
people
 are more unable to earn
money
 and make ends meet by themselves ,
thus
 , the more
people
 claim pension benefits , the more the
government
 struggles to meet an
ever rising
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 number of retired workers and pension commitments . Another problem of growing
life
expectancy
 is that it leads to
the
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 shortage of labour as well as wage inflation in the working environment . Because of the shrinking working population , many companies have to push up the salary to attract more employees to work for their organization . As a consequence , wage inflation is much more prevalent among these developed
countries
 . The
government
 could certainly make more effort to mitigate these negative effects of increasing
life
expectancy
 . The
first
 solution would be to educate
people
 about the importance of
money
 management and saving for retirement . By adhering to a strict budget, older
people
 will have a certain amount of
money
 to pay their bills and take care of themselves without support from their children or the
government
 , which could reduce the burden on the economy of their
countries
 .
Finally
 , the
government
 can provide great opportunities
such
 as scholarships or accommodations for abroad students to come , study , and
also
 work in their
countries
 . By encouraging the immigration of young
people
 , not only lack of labour but
also
 wage inflation can be remarkably alleviated . In conclusion , it is evident that there are several problems of increasing
life
expectancy
 , including greater funding demands as well as
shortage
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 of young workers , and a variety of solutions, especially raising public awareness of
money
 management and encouraging young migrants of working age .
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average life expectancy
  • developed world
  • increase
  • individuals
  • society
  • personal goals
  • ambitions
  • quality of life
  • leisure
  • recreation
  • healthcare costs
  • challenges
  • healthcare system
  • ageing population
  • shortage
  • available workers
  • economy
  • retirement planning
  • healthy lifestyles
  • investing
  • social support systems
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