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Some people think that women should play an equal role in the police and military while others think women are less suitable for these roles. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Females are nowadays very active in all fields ranging from sports, medicine to the military. The topic of whether they should be given an equal share of opportunity, responsibility is debatable. I am of the notion that both genders must be offered similar chances to get the best results. On the one hand, some argue that males are more potent as compared to the opposite sex. Those who support
this
 point of view, assert that ladies are bodily weak and lack the physical strength needed to surmount challenges faced, especially, in the context of the army.
Consequently
, they are not able to stop the "armed miscreants," who can attack anyone.
In addition
, women are sometimes not able to take tough calls, specifically when a nation has been intruded on by terrorists. So, it may seem as if men are more suitable for
such
 duties.
However
, those who are in accord with "Women Empowerment" say that they are equally capable. Dr Kiran Bedi,
for example
, was an ideal officer who was able to alleviate the number of crime cases. She
also
 had arranged various meditation sessions for persons suffering in jail, in order to improve their mental well being. Compassion, which is a very essential quality is found more in girls. To support
this
 statement, I would cite a Chinese Businessman, Jack Ma, founder of Alibaba, who said that the company recruits women more as they care about others.
Therefore
, there should be no doubt about their ability. So to sum up, I believe that ladies must
also
 be given a similar chance to prove that they are as equal as men.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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