Some people think that the only way to judge someone’s success in business is by the amount of money they make. Is this a true indicator of the success of a business and in what other ways could success in a business be measured?

The Positive Way of thinking and the innovative
business
idea has become the foundation of the rapid growth of my
business
. In fact,
Work
hard to achieve my target and never give up when I feel has become back born for my life and
also
for
business
. My father taught me a lot, but only
one
thing makes me wisdom and kept in my mind always. "The heights by great men reached and kept were not attained by sudden flight, but they, while their companions slept, were toiling upward in the night": which quote by Henry Wadsworth Longfellow.
Hence
, I used to
work
hard as much as possible, and I think smart always to grow my
business
and career. At the age of 10, I was among weaker physical abilities compared to my other colleagues.
Then
I started
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one
of the famous martial art called “Wushu” that
also
known as “Kung-Fu” to develop my physical fitness and endurance. I
practiced
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hard for about 4 years, even without any medal in competition every ear, and become the School National Wushu champion.
Then
after few years, I have become the National Champion in Wushu, and at that time I had won so many national and international medals. It proves my father’s poem and pays the price of my sweat that dropped.
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,
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passion
of
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to
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target in life. I
work
hard in my career and learn
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of knowledge and experience that
work
with 4 companies.
Moreover
, I had a chance to
work
under CEO’s and Director’s and, it improves my pattern of thinking, decision making and proactive. My
first
job was in a small
company
, but it taught me how to act as
“Big
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fish in a
small
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Pond”. More specifically, after seeing my performance of handling projects and people my Boss offered to handle whole projects on my own. It improved not
also
my confidence, ability of
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and handling the
work
pressure, but
company
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also
gain more profits and won few of
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amount of Construction project tenders too.
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with the rest of
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companies, I learnt as “Small fish in a
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Pond”. In
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, I can share
one
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that I use my creative way of thinking to save
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of time and improve our response speed to
clients
. That was a furniture
company
and I used to
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as a Quantity Surveyor and my duty was to
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of custom quotation for each and every client’s requirement. I took about 3-4 hour to prepare
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quotation with calculation all material cost, wastages and profits. So I have invented
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system that anyone can enter the table size or figures and it gives us quotation in just
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. My boss
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and he’s over the moon, cause I save his money for spending unnecessary
work
hours and it helps us to get more customers owing to
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response. It is vital to note that, the experience I earned
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and
its
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priceless
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thing that once can earn his
life
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. All these together I started my
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as an entrepreneur and Launch my Design firm in 2016 as a sole proprietor
company
. In
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I have
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it to
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limited
company
and become the few of the best famous design firms in my country.
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vision and habit of
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makes my
business
serves more than 700 local
clients
and
then
I expand it
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global and it drives me
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than 300
clients
for the moment. Whether
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lot of big companies lost their revenue and some of them bankrupted with Covid-19 pandemic, but we
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even day by day. I have implemented online orders and held
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with video calls with
clients
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door step
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with free currier service. That’s how I make it the best
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the others. I strongly trust that I can
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skills that
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in your institution to my
company
and grow it to much higher. To conclude, I’m keen to earn MBA
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University Canada west and become
one
of the best entrepreneurs that passed out from the university.
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