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Some people think that the only way to judge someone’s success in business is by the amount of money they make. Is this a true indicator of the success of a business and in what other ways could success in a business be measured?

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The Positive Way of thinking and the innovative
business
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 idea has become the foundation of the rapid growth of my
business
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. In fact,
Work
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 hard to achieve my target and never give up when I feel has become back born for my life and
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 for
business
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. My father taught me a lot, but only
one
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 thing makes me wisdom and kept in my mind always. "The heights by great men reached and kept were not attained by sudden flight, but they, while their companions slept, were toiling upward in the night": which quote by Henry Wadsworth Longfellow.
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, I used to
work
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 hard as much as possible, and I think smart always to grow my
business
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 and career. At the age of 10, I was among weaker physical abilities compared to my other colleagues.
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 I started
practicing
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one
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 of the famous martial art called “Wushu” that
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 known as “Kung-Fu” to develop my physical fitness and endurance. I
practiced
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 hard for about 4 years, even without any medal in competition every ear, and become the School National Wushu champion.
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 after few years, I have become the National Champion in Wushu, and at that time I had won so many national and international medals. It proves my father’s poem and pays the price of my sweat that dropped.
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,
the
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my
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 passion
of
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for
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eager
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eagerness
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 to
success
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succeed
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 in
career
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a career
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 become
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next
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the next
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 target in life. I
work
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 hard in my career and learn
plethora
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a plethora
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 of knowledge and experience that
work
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 with 4 companies.
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, I had a chance to
work
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 under CEO’s and Director’s and, it improves my pattern of thinking, decision making and proactive. My
first
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 job was in a small
company
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, but it taught me how to act as
“Big
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a “Big
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 fish in a
small
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 Pond”. More specifically, after seeing my performance of handling projects and people my Boss offered to handle whole projects on my own. It improved not
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 my confidence, ability of
administration
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the administration
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 and handling the
work
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 pressure, but
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company
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the company
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also
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 gain more profits and won few of
large
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 amount of Construction project tenders too.
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 with the rest of
big
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the big
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 companies, I learnt as “Small fish in a
small
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 Pond”. In
particularly
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, I can share
one
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 of my
experience
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experiences
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 that I use my creative way of thinking to save
lot
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a lot
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 of time and improve our response speed to
clients
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. That was a furniture
company
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 and I used to
working
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 as a Quantity Surveyor and my duty was to
preparation
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the preparation
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 of custom quotation for each and every client’s requirement. I took about 3-4 hour to prepare
custom
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a custom
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 quotation with calculation all material cost, wastages and profits. So I have invented
new
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a new
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 system that anyone can enter the table size or figures and it gives us quotation in just
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second
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a second
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. My boss
impressed
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is impressed
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 and he’s over the moon, cause I save his money for spending unnecessary
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 hours and it helps us to get more customers owing to
instance
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 response. It is vital to note that, the experience I earned
remarkable
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 and
its
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it's
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priceless
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a priceless
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 thing that once can earn his
life
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. All these together I started my
Journey
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 as an entrepreneur and Launch my Design firm in 2016 as a sole proprietor
company
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. In
same
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the same
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 year of
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end
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 I have
expand
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 it to
private
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a private
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 limited
company
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 and become the few of the best famous design firms in my country.
With my
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 vision and habit of
hard
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hard-working
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working
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 makes my
business
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 serves more than 700 local
clients
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 and
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 I expand it
to
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global and it drives me
more
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to more
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 than 300
clients
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 for the moment. Whether
,
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 lot of big companies lost their revenue and some of them bankrupted with Covid-19 pandemic, but we
grows
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 even day by day. I have implemented online orders and held
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a meetup
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meetup
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meetups
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 with video calls with
clients
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. Especially, we have implemented the delivery design to their
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doorstep
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door step
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doorstep
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 with free currier service. That’s how I make it the best
from
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 the others. I strongly trust that I can
implemented
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management
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the management
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 skills that
offered
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are offered
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 in your institution to my
company
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 and grow it to much higher. To conclude, I’m keen to earn MBA
in
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at
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 University Canada west and become
one
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 of the best entrepreneurs that passed out from the university.
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