Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is argued that
children
of low-income
families
are better equipped in terms of facing
life
challenges in adulthood compared to
children
of high-income
families
.
Although
some advocate that
children
with poor
upbringing
would
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be more
resiliant
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resilient
to cope with problems,
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life
has to offer, I disagree with
this
notion because of two main reasons: delinquency and disenchantment. To commence with, the
parents
play a huge role as role models. They establish some convections and codes of conduct for their
children
which
then
their
children
can follow later on, hopefully leading to a
life
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of truancy and delinquency.
However
,
families
with low-income may not always be there to establish these ground rules as they would be more occupied with their work in return for wages.
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combination of
absence
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of parenting and poor
upbringing
would increase their likelihood
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embarking on a
life
of delinquency or worse.
For instance
, in the movie "Dangerous mind" it was apparent that it was frequent
children
with poor
upbringing
who tended to play truant and
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delinquent
. In stark contrast,
children
of wealthy
families
are somewhat insulated from these problems, as their
parents
do not have to fend for their
life
in
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way. Admittedly, not all
children
of poor
parents
would be prone to a
life
of crimes. Some may learn from their
parents
, appreciate hard work and develop responsibilities towards their fellow citizens and contribute equally in the community along with their
parents
.
However
, it would not be without feelings of being trapped in an evil cycle of disenchantment because of their consistent circumstances. In conclusion,
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cordially believe that there is a strong association between a child
upbringing
and coping mechanisms in adulthood.
Thus
, I disagree that
children
of poor
families
are better prepared to handle problems in their adulthood.
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