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IT’S GENERALLY BELIEVED THAT SUCCESS IN FIELDS SUCH AS ART AND SPORT CAN ONLY BE ACHIEVED IF A PERSON HAS NATURAL TALENT. HOWEVER, IT’S SOMETIMES CLAIMED THAT ANY CHILD CAN BE TAUGHT TO BECOME A GOOD SPORTS PERSON OR ARTIST. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Every person has a different skill set some of them are acquired by birth and some are instilled by themselves. People believe that
one
 must have inherited sport & art
skills
 from their family while some claims opposite that
this
 expertise can be learnt to become successful in these particular areas.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and suggest how a skillset can be inculcated in
one
's
life
 and provide him/her a successful future. Many people believe that natural talent is necessary for an artist and a sports person to get a name and fame in these fields. As they don't have to invest time into these
skills
 which have gained from their generations. Daughter of all-time famous Bollywood actor Shakti Kapoor can be used as an example, she never attended modelling or acting school to instil the art of acting into herself,
this
 talent she has gained in inheritance.
Therefore
, children who are born with
this
 natural expertise do not have to struggle in their careers to become popular.
On the other hand
, children who are not born talented but are highly determined towards sport and other artistic areas have others ways to incorporate these
skills
 into their lives
such
 as; by joining sports classes, clubs or craft schools. In
this
 way, they can compete with others without any hesitance and will prove themselves on the international and national levels.
For example
, Football play "Cristiano Ronaldo" has no family history of football players, but he excelled in
this
 field by his own hard work and determination.
Thus
 it proves that talents can
also
 be taught or learnt on self-realization when
one
 feels an attachment to that specific profession. I personally prefer learning these talents on their own will are more precious and has the tendency to turn
one
's
life
 poor to rich or infamous to famous.
Therefore
, we should always keep our heads high and try to learn more
life
 lessons or
skills
, with constant practice anything is possible in
life
. In conclusion, after considering both views it can be said that
life
 long learnings do make a difference in standing
one
 out of the crowd, while family acquired
skills
 are well-expected that
this
 is going to happen in the future.
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