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Many countries today are experiencing problems associated with noise pollution (excessive noise above a normal background noise.) What are the causes of this phenomenon, and what effects does it have on the people affected?

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recent
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noise
 pollution has been raised.
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awareness
 regarding the
effects
 of
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. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the causes as well as the
effects
 on
this
 issue, and I will give my personal opinion. there are several causes of
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noise
 pollution. The main cause is traffic congestion.
For example
, a lot of motors on the street
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 will cause high
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volume
 sounds
such
 as horn sounds and
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angry
 crowds' sounds. Another factor is newly designed buildings.
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 those buildings contain a lot of apartments, and each apartment produces
noise
, as
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a consequence
, you will be in the middle of continuous sounds waives.
Finally
, the usage of machines and electronic devices.
For instance
, continuous use of the air conditioning here in UAE, as it makes a lot of
noise
.
This
 problem affects our life and health in several ways.
Firstly
, it affects our physical and psychological health and
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us several issues
such
 as high blood pressure and depression.
Furthermore
, it's damaging our brain. As a consequence, we
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 not concentrate anymore.
This
 will lead to serious injuries especially if your work is sensitive and needs your full attention.
Also
, according to scientists, it's responsible for low academic achievement among school-aged children. In conclusion,
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noise
 pollution is a serious issue.
This
 is because of its
effects
 on our body and mind health, as well as on our
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 safety.
Moreover
, the
effects
 on our children achievements. The causes of
this
 problem are several.
Such
 as traffic
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congestion
, modern huge buildings, and electronic machines.
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