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Many different countries have most shops and products as the same. Some think that it is a positive development, whereas others consider it as negative. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The need for good food and lifestyle is paramount for every human being to live a good life. It is common for people to choose a business for a good income. It has been observed that the things used in industry are almost the same no matter what the country is. In my opinion, there are advantages and disadvantages, which have been discussed in the following article before I conclude. On the one hand, the main advantage of parodying the process of selling
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 your shop is the popularity of the
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.
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 company benefits significantly from it.
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, it is impossible to sell a good
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 without proper advertising.
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, for heavy sales of that item, it is necessary to have every prevalent seller, a branded computer, when the company puts it on the market for
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 to maintain the presence of that
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 with each of its vendors
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 that the
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 can be sold when needed.
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, manifesting the
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 through a good seller can be justified for a good
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 of that
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.
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,
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 of advertising one type of
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 may include a lack of perception about the other
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.
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, when only one
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 made by the company is advertised for
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, and the same
goods
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 are found in every shop, the use of small but profitable
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 will be denied.
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, the Maruti brand car is widely used in India, but the lack of notoriety for its brand carburettor has a detrimental effect on its economy.
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, the popularity of
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 merchandise ought to be admired for acknowledging their significance. In conclusion, with both contentions in mind, I opine that
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 there are several benefits to using the same type of material, the most influential of
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 is
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 consultancy should not be denied.
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, the
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 of every kind of
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 must have its own significance.

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task response
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic. It should guide the reader on what to expect.
coherence cohesion
Use clear and simple language to express your ideas. Avoid complicated phrases that may confuse the reader.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should have a clear main idea. Try to focus on one idea per paragraph and explain it fully.
task response
You have attempted to balance both views before giving your opinion, which is good for this type of essay.
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Some examples provided show an effort to connect your points to real-life situations, which can help the reader understand your ideas better.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Homogenization
  • Multinational corporations
  • Consumer culture
  • Economic disparity
  • Cultural diversity
  • Standardization
  • Local enterprises
  • Cultural erosion
  • Mass market
  • Brand recognition
  • Economic integration
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