The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school. To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?
Education
cannot just be linked with formal
degree and book learning. It is a vast topic that covers moral values, discipline and academics. Add an article
a formal
the formal
These
learning are gained from Correct determiner usage
This
school
, friends, family and even some life experiences. In my opinion, without the help of knowledge gained from family
the goal of Add an article
the family
a family
education
is incomplete.
Family is considered as the first
school
of the child
and from there the child
learns social behaviours. Etiquettes, discipline and morality are some qualities that are necessary to adjust in a society and these moral lessons are taught by the family. There are many
Correct quantifier usage
much
evidences
that Children grown without a proper family or in a foster home don’t have a bright future even with formal Change the wording
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
education
. I agree that in order to be a lawyer or doctor, you need to do well at school
and have professional qualifications but without any good manners
no Add a comma
,manners
careers
will be successful. Because nobody would like to be in the Fix the agreement mistake
career
surrounding
full of ruthless, unethical and immoral people. From ancient times our culture has taught us to be good and respectful because it is a sign of a good human and family teaches us to be that.
Fix the agreement mistake
surroundings
However
, apart from formal education
school
teaches students about hardships and challenges in life. School
has that competitive environment in academics, sports, debate and other extracurricular which prepares students to work hard and get success in life. Not only this
, in school
, a child
meets different people and learns to do collaborative work and adjust in
a new environment. They will make friends and explore new Change preposition
to
thing
which can be both bad and good Fix the agreement mistake
things
stuffs
. Youngsters will try to solve their Change the wording
stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
problem
on their own which makes them independent. Whereas in Fix the agreement mistake
problems
family
, a Correct article usage
a family
child
is grown in a protected environment and may not be able to self-stand.
In conclusion, despite many positive aspects of learning in school
the base of a child
is still developed at home. The way a person behaves reflects the values taught by their parents from starting. However
, school
provides extra help to continue the good learning and utilize that in future. Add an article
the school
Hence
, learning in school
and Add a hyphen
in-home
in
Change preposition
at
home
goes hand in hand.Add an article
the home
a home
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