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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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World’s population increasingly moves to another
country
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 as globalization becomes permanent. It is believed by some that,
people
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 living in a foreign
country
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 that has a different
language
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 they are not native in, can experience some problems related to human interaction as well as the way of doing things.
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 essay will argue that experiencing everything from beginning in a new place without knowing any single word can be completely difficult for
people
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 who are going through
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. No matter where
people
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 live they will feel bored and decide to leave the
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 because of certain things.
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 their eternal search for new challenges affects their worldview, any differences are needed for reducing the void inside them. Indeed, newcomers are the ones who left their homeland with the hopes to find their new homes, with their lively nature they adapt to the environment quickly.
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, if some
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 didn’t give up the lives they used to have, it would be impossible to catch many opportunities in another
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,
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 can have new chances in completely different destinations. Despite the fact that the foreign
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 learning rates boomed today, it remains a problem for immigrants. More importantly, alongside the
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 issues, they are treated differently by the new homeland’s population. Not all societies developed in a way that they can easily accept migrants, especially the ones that have various skin
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, the wish for living better life causes social issues for newcomers by making them antisocial and they are getting hurt easily. Thereby,
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 experience types of hardships due to foreign
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 and a new way of living.
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 essay argued that the consequences of choosing a different life are inevitable and have resulted in problems of human interaction and
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 practical things. I completely agree with
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 statement as I believe there are drawbacks
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 trying to work it out in a new
country
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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