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The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is generally accepted that the role of
women
 has drastically altered in a
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myriad
 of
socities
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societies
.
However
, some people assert that these societies cannot be claimed to have achieved
gender
equality
.I disagree with
this
 statement to a large extent and I will put forward a number of reasons in
this
 essay. It can be vividly observed that
women
 have been provided with a plethora of job opportunities in
this
 era and,they even obtain a more prestigious occupation than men.A good illustration of
this
 would be a manifold of workplaces nowadays in which
women
 are executive managers or presidents.Despite the fact that there is a
classical
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 stereotype of
women
 being
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solely
 responsible for household chores
such
 as cleaning the dishes and cooking meals,a number of work environments being led by females can be seen ubiquitously.
Moreover
, it is
also
 worth pointing out that there has been a swelling number of female politicians and leaders across the globe.If
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women
 had not actually gained
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gender
equality
 as men, many female leaders and representatives of
authories
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authorities
authorises
 would not have emerged.
In addition
, various
women
 have been employed for
millitary
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military
 and police
servies
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services
 around the world,albeit not without exceptions.Just because
women
 are generally weaker than men, it
doen
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does
 not necessarily follow that they cannot work for physically demanding occupations.
Therefore
, it is clear that
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discrimination
to
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women
 is virtually impossible for the time being. What is more,notwithstanding the fact that
women
 are more responsible for
upbringing
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 of
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 as they are naturally inclined ,stay-at-home fathers have become more common these days.
Consequently
,it would not be an
exaggertion
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exaggeration
 to say that
gender
equality
 has been approved. To recapitulate,
although
 there are some
commpelling
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compelling
 counterparts,I am quite convinced that the old
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conservative
 beliefs and traditions have been eliminated and
gender
equality
 has been accommodated.I fervently deem that well-established laudable
gender
equality
 will be preserved and we are in for some unprecedented developments in the future.
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