children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, education is welfare from the government
that is
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necessary for everyone, but the undeveloped countries maybe not support
this
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welfare. So the
children
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who are born and raised in wealthy
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maybe have more opportunities than the
children
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who do not have money. So that will cause a gap junction between wealthy
children
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and poor
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, but that did not be a part of the ability to deal with
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in adult life. The most of the problem in adult life has occurred from a community of where you lived.
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, The relationship between your family, if you are those who born and raised in a wealthy family, you might be faced with the troubles less than those who born in the poor
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because they maybe have the problem about money or debt that have to arrangement more than the wealthy family.
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,
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poor
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will suffer troubles more than wealthy
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, that will make more a chance to face the
problems
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and improve their skills to deal with those
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much better than some wealthy
children
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can do. Summarizing my opinion, regardless of the family is wealthy or poor, both types of family you grow up with will have different ways to deal with the
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and suffer different
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.
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, the main thing that proves to yourself that you can deal with your
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in adulthood is not your family but is your attempt and attention that you put in to solve those
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