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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #art #children #school #waste #time
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Art
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 has been one of the greatest concerns at school that
parents
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 paying attention to in recent years. While some
people
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 argue that
art
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 is an important sense for a child,
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 believe that youngsters do not need to spend their
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 to study
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 accountable. In
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 essay, both these opinions will be reviewed before my opinion is put forward.
People
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 who believe that teenagers need to know about
art
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 often give two main reasons.
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,
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 subject helps your infant have creativity. When they are a kid, in the minds of children, they have a lot of creative images.
Art
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 has them develop their brain more about thinking and brainstorming.
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,
art
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 help teenagers can talk their story through a picture, which acts as a bridge preventing them from talking with their
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. Sometimes, in life, maybe everyone has a story too difficult to talk about with somebody. So, if you feel uncomfortable when you talk directly, you can find
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 to help you to solve problems.
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, other
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 think that their youth do not spend their life studying
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 for some reason.
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 and foremost, some minors spend all their space draw, they forget many subjects in their school. Maybe
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 reason makes their score decreased,
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 means, their
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 avoid them drawing, because they are afraid their sons become an unintelligent student in their eye teacher.
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, some
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 thought that craft can not bring anything beneficial for their child. Because, nowadays, the world is developing very fast, everyone focuses on the technologies to develop. So their
parents
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 want them to stop the waste of
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 in
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, and start learning about technology to develop themself. While many
parents
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 suggest that
art
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 is a truly essential subject, others believe that
art
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 is a waste of
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 and effort for students. In my opinion,
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 is essential and worth the
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 and effort for students, and,
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people
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 should think positively and encourage their children to learn drawing.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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