Each year, the crime rate increases. What do you think are the causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

Each year criminal cases increases in the whole world and
this
problem might damage our life.
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crime
rate in our societies and give some
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to prevent
this
problem.
To begin
with, there are many reasons behind the sharp increase in the
crime
percentage all over the world.
Firstly
, addiction could be the most
reasons
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of
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why the rate of
crime
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increased, drugs spread among students in many high schools, and they became
unawareness
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of what they do.
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, the renowned public magazine published that many cases of
crime
in America because of drugs from high school students.
Secondly
, ignorance could be the reason
of
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violence. It leads to illegal activities, some families could not efforts education for their children.
Finally
,
also
poverty leads
people
to commit
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a crime
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crime
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crimes
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such
as
thefts
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theft
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.
On the other hand
,
this
problem could be solved
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many ways.
For instance
, allowing free education for
people
who cannot get
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could be limited ignorance in many societies.
Also
, providing jobs for poor
people
and give them insurance
this
can
be prevent
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crime
like thefts.
Moreover
,
rehabilitation
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program for those who
has
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addiction
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an addiction
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and give them medical plan even after they left the rehab, they should check them
regular
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. In conclusion, there are many different methods to decreased
crime
cases in the whole world and make our societies
safety
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such
as
,
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providing jobs to poor families, allowing free education for children and rehabilitation
program
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programs
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for
addict
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people
.
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