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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, public transport has been key for travelling to distant places, there are myriad ways of transportations
such
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 as
railways
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, airways, seaways and roads. If an individual is willing to
travel
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 to far places
trains
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 and aeroplanes are
only
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the only
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 ways to reach his/her destination.
Majority
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The majority
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 of
people
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 agree that
,
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apply
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that governments
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that government
those governments
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 needed to put much income on the
railways
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 upon the roads.
First
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 of all, as travelling to long distances only include
railways
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 and aeroplanes the ticket fare for aeroplanes is higher
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than
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that
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than
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 most
of
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the
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apply
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people
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 cannot afford. So,
government
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the government
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 need
consider
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this
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 issue and try to increase the number of
trains
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 and tracks for the
trains
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, the process becomes much effortless for many
people
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.
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, In
India
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 if a person wanted to
travel
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 to
place
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a place
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 through train the respective person needs to book the ticket
atleast
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at least
 two months in advance
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so that his/her berth can be confirmed.
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, as everyone knows that cars are
bit
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 costly, and
on the other hand
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, petrol and diesel prices have reached the sky, myriad
people
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 do not prefer cars and other personal vehicles to
travel
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 to farther places. Whereas,
trains
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 are considered to be
cheapest
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the cheapest
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 way of transport with luxury and comforts included.
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,
government
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the government
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 need
focus
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to focus
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 on new technologies to improve
railway
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the railway
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 system.
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, many countries
has
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 introduced bullet
trains
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 which can
travel
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with
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at
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 a speed of 500
kilometers
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kilometres
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 per hour and makes
journey
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the journey
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 fast and comfortable. In conclusion, governments are needed to focus keenly on
development
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the development
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 of modern technologies to make
people
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 journey effortless and comfortable, investing much capital on
railways
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 rather than roads can make travelling with significantly less duration.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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