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International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment.

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the legal of each
country
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 has different rules that include with the international travelling legal too, that will make both advantages and disadvantages for those
countries
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. So the impact of
tourism
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 may be determined by either the legal of that
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 they go to or the behaviour that they do.
Tourism
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 makes many benefits to the
country
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 they go to, but if they have advantages, it may be had disadvantages.
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, some travellers have a purpose to make a good experience with cultures or wherever they go, but for some tourists, the purpose of those are not to be travelled to find new experiences but may have to be a connection to sell or import the illegal drugs to those
countries
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 that will cause troubles in that
countries
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. So the illegal tourist maybe uses
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 way to causes the worst to the environment by making the native people addicted to the drugs that they import into that
country
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 and
also
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 the way to pandemic SAR-COV2(COVID-19)
on the other hand
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, the tourists, that come to announce the religion or cultures of their
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, will make many benefits and connections between their
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, and
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 it will improve the economy of those counties which lead to domestic money circulation and make the native people have a better life. in the conclusion of my opinion, regardless of either international
tourism
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 or tourist, have different impacts in the ways that they come. So International
tourism
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 has a similar number of pros and cons, But what determines whether it is advantages or disadvantages is determined by the purpose of the tourists for what they do.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enormous benefit
  • impact
  • local inhabitants
  • environment
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • advantages
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructure development
  • promotion
  • local products
  • environmental impact
  • exploitation
  • resources
  • cultural erosion
  • increased cost of living
  • overcrowding
  • congestion
  • balancing
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
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