The only way to improve the safety of our roads is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. What extent do you agree or disagree?

Road safety has become a pipe dream for most individuals living on Earth.
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a significant number of people become victims of accidents
thus
making it a global concern.
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a plethora of steps
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been taken to alleviate these mishaps, the number of casualties
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not declined yet. Some people hold the view that punishing drivers is the only way to ameliorate road safety, while I believe that it is necessarily not the only solution.
This
essay tends to explain the reasoning behind my viewpoint.
To begin
with, drivers are not the only persons to be blamed for these casualties, highway conditions are
also
responsible. Nowadays, streets are constructed with substandard materials,
accordingly
, potholes are formed during the rainy season.
Similarly
, ongoing maintenance of streets leaves behind dug-up roadways without any proper barricades.
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of street lights
also
exacerbates the problem.
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, recently an Indian girl was run over by a truck. At
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her scooter fell in a pit and she fell on the road, before she could get up a truck hit her because the trucker did not see her due to darkness.
Additionally
, inferior vehicle conditions contribute to accidents. In Bangladesh, most public buses are 10 to 20 years old
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but are still running on the highways. So, in times of emergency, it is impossible for the operators to stop the vehicle. In worst scenarios the buses can collide with another automobile, killing all the passengers on board.
Moreover
, there are no organised traffic regulations and highway patrol in most cities
hence
no security. Due to dysfunctional traffic lights,
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of pedestrians and cars coincide resulting in misfortunes. Considering all these, the government should be held blameworthy as it is the authority's responsibility to provide safer public transportation and systematic traffic rules. To conclude, mishaps are caused not only by reckless driving but by several other factors. Improved roadways, vehicles and laws are indispensable to enhance the safety of our roads.
Therefore
, I disagree with the given statement.
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