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Many people believe that social networking site(such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. to what extent you agree?

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Social networking
sites
,
for example
, Facebook, are one of the ways which we use to communicate with other
people
 at the present.
However
, I believe that
such
sites
 have enormous benefits to individuals, I agree that they have had a damaging effect on the local community. with regards to individuals, The impact that online social
media
 has had on each person has clear advantages.
Firstly
, in the past, communication needs a long time to contact other
people
 but nowadays social
media
 make we can communicate with other
people
 that have the same interest or meet the new community to share their ideas faster than it used to be.
secondly
, social
media
 is the one way to make money.
for instance
, you can publish your performance to attract the attention of the
people
 who interest in your work.
on the other hand
, the effect of the
sites
such
 as Facebook which have a lot of news
that is
 published every
second
 may not have been analyzed.
consequently
, they can be made a misunderstanding of
people
 who read the news or information that have on
sites
.
Furthermore
, addicted social
media
 is one of the diseases caused by a lot of using social
media
, which will lead those
people
 to be a depression. to conclude,
although
 I think social
media
 has benefits to individuals which brought us together and make a chance to meet other
people
, they did not have had a good examination or screening process before
people
 post their information on the public
sites
. So the local community should do more action to secure the information.
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